It is fantastic and wonderful that everyone so far finds the story interesting! I have some more plans for stories in the same world.
This was my first published piece of writing (not counting self published comics and the one time I had a super short comic in an indy anthology) so I am gunning for every scrap of feedback I can get! If anything jumped out at you that could be improved on let me know! Like what Olivia said! I can use that to improve! Thank you!! :D