Understandable, taking that aspect out did change the story quite a bit. Not sure why that was there in the first place. At any rate, I’ll think on some more ideas.
It’s easy to get so focused on marketing or pleasing your publisher that you stop putting your heart into your work. I agree, this is what stopped me from pitching somethings before. I got freaked out with trying to make everything perfect that I froze and didn’t end up doing anything. I’m glad for these mini pitching sessions, they certainly easy that fear of getting one shot to make it or break it, so to speak.